IELTS WRITING TASK1

IELTS WRITING TASK1, 아이엘츠 라이팅 테스크 1 작성하고, 수정해 보았습니다. 정말 아직도 미숙함을 보며, 더 공부할 것이 많구나를 느낍니다.

 

"The charts showed that typical meals are consumed with sodium, saturated fats and added sugars, as facts of when people ate too much to be affected themselves.

This essay will distribute the gap at people’s typical meals such as breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks.

->"This essay will analyze the gaps in people's typical meals such as breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks."

 

Overall, snacks have a lot of sugar better than other meals. Also, Dinner has a lot of saturated fat and sodium.

-> "Overall, snacks contain a higher amount of sugar compared to other meals. Furthermore, dinner contains high amounts of saturated fat and sodium."

However, breakfast and lunch do not have the biggest number of unhealthy nutrients. First of all, regarding sugar, the tinniest one of the meals is breakfast at 16 per cent, however, the biggest part is snacks at 42 per cent.

 

The two parts which are breakfast and snack have 3 times gaps.

-> Breakfast and snacks have a three-fold difference.

 And lunch is 19 per cent, and dinner is 23 per cent. Secondly, according to saturated fat, breakfast and dinner have two times gaps, as each per cent 16, 37. Per cent of amount at lunch and snack is similar.

 

 Otherwise, as sodium, the smaller factors are not only snacks but also breakfast as the same per cent 14. "

->Moreover, when it comes to sodium, not only snacks but also breakfast has a smaller amount, both at 14 percent."